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Advocating Poems that speak out...fightin' for a cause, public or personal, all are of equal importance...

 
 
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Old October 16th, 2008, 12:52 AM
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Fallen Angels

My Dear Uncle,

Dear deceiver and charlatan
murderer of dreams
assassin of normalcy
you can no longer fondle us
in the dark.
Luring us with your promises…

Where is my arm?

A vision of black blood… timeless

Uncle,
sway us to your side
fling shells like coins
let them rain slantways
with deadly percussion
*… heartbeat…heart… Click*

No time for introspection

*DUCK!!!*

Hail a rainbow of brass and light
too many die from lead poisoning.

Where is my Fucking ARM!?!

Uncle,
We follow
cult-like

*Atten-hut*

Seas of desert cammo and green
Washing away our debts
clean with M-16’s
blood of the father
echo’s in the soul of the son.
heartbeats vibrato
as assault rifles hum

*25,000 signing bonus
an Army of One*

Where is my arm?
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Old October 16th, 2008, 01:17 AM
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Damn, I Remember Reading Some Other Pieces From You N In Every Poem Your Words Have A Strong Presence N This One Is No Different ... The Message Is Felt N Homie, Youre Talented In This. One Of The Top Poets Here. Much Respect, Homie.
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Old October 16th, 2008, 09:33 AM
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Whoa, I can't lie..at first I was like...damn...crazy about a molesting uncle...thought it'd get deep like that, but you definitely took it to a deeper end with uncle Sam..



Quote:
Hail a rainbow of brass and light
too many die from lead poisoning.
- wow, the imagery....loved this..


Quote:
assassin of normalcy
- Amen...great line..


The entire piece was just a good read...


I really really enjoyed this...thank you for the read.


Stay up, do you and always...
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Old October 16th, 2008, 01:04 PM
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This is a gem right here. I'm not big on the font decorum lol, but this write hit the spot. What inspired it?
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Old October 17th, 2008, 06:15 PM
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speechless.
this was amazing
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Old October 19th, 2008, 01:06 PM
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this needs to be potw... somebody ? ^_^
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Old October 19th, 2008, 05:02 PM
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*sighs*

I'm going to keep reading until I find something to critique you on. lol.
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Old October 20th, 2008, 08:52 PM
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word, I thought this was a molestation joint, but then you flipped it on the military level, a short one for you but very powerful fams. Good stuff.
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Old October 21st, 2008, 12:30 AM
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I cosign with ppl here I thought it was a molestation piece then the end blew me away def tight joint right here.
keep scribing
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Old October 27th, 2008, 04:09 PM
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thank you for the love and respect...inspired by the current situations regarding recruiters lying to our youth
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On the Boulevard of broken dreams,
I bleed through steepled fingers
signing blood into the air
for the blind to smell and the deaf to see
my meaning is lost to no one

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Old October 27th, 2008, 04:17 PM
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You really souljeered on this piece. This is chill / And it definitely blox an unwarranted draft.. Need to keep this up front. where the front is all around.
solid drop. Mr. S.

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Old October 28th, 2008, 07:51 AM
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stronger descriptiveness than ur usual material..
not that long ass shit that u usually be doing-
more passion to this, not long winded- hidden jewels but right in our faces

my fav from u.


respect.
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